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| == Advocate's comments -- [[User:Jsoares|Jsoares]] ([[User talk:Jsoares|talk]]) 20:09, 9 December 2015 (CST) ==
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| This is a major technical achievement, absolutely worthy of an IEEE Milestone. However, the process is still incomplete and cannot be moved for consideration until all the material is provided.
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| As the history committee advocate for this proposal, I suggest the following improvements:
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| 1) As it is, the citation places an emphasis on the system’s acceptance by NASA (possibly because one can pinpoint the date of that event). While that information is relevant, I believe it would be best to reverse the order, and first focus on the development of the system by SPAR/NRCC. This is not a requirement, merely a suggestion.
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| 2) The current answer describing the historical significance of the work narrates the history of the contract while failing to emphasise the importance of the work. It should be expanded, perhaps with concrete examples of what the system has been used for (fixing Hubble, for instance) and the capabilities it provided (the citation does a better job at this).
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| 3) The proposers have not explained how this work differs from past/similar achievements. One should mention its pioneering role as a general-purpose space-deployed robotic arm. Would it be possible to detail specific technical differences?
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| 4) No references are provided. A quick search turned up the following technical papers from the 1980s detailing the system and its accomplishments:
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| http://scitation.aip.org/content/avs/journal/jvsta/1/2/10.1116/1.572085
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| http://scitation.aip.org/content/avs/journal/jvsta/4/3/10.1116/1.573952
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| A flashback news item on the Canadarm:
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| http://www.ctvnews.ca/5things/flashback-friday-canadarm-reaches-into-space-for-the-first-time-1.2649159
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| A live broadcast on the first use of the arm:
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| http://www.cbc.ca/archives/entry/the-canadarm-comes-through
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| An article on the Hubble repair:
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| http://www.cbc.ca/archives/entry/fixing-the-troubled-hubble
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| And, finally, a NASA review article on the 25th anniversary:
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| http://www.nasa.gov/mission_pages/shuttle/behindscenes/rms_anniversary.html
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| I trust that the authors can locate more relevant material. The references could also provide some content to complete the answers to the previous questions.
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| 5) Supporting material (e.g. relevant reports, images) is also missing. NASA provides several public domain photos of the arm:
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| http://www.nasa.gov/mission_pages/shuttle/behindscenes/rms_gallery.html
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| And SPAR can hopefully provide documentation on the project.
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| Thank you for submitting the proposal, and I look forward to working with you to further refine the package so that we can can get it approved by the committee.
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| Cheers,
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| Jorge Soares
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