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In 1863, Antonio Pacinotti, at the University of Pisa, described and built an early direct-current dynamo equipped with a ring armature, the first in  Italy. He connected the groups of turns of the closed armature winding to the bars of a commutator. Pacinotti's machine was a practical dynamo because it produced steady current without pulses.
 
In 1863, Antonio Pacinotti, at the University of Pisa, described and built an early direct-current dynamo equipped with a ring armature, the first in  Italy. He connected the groups of turns of the closed armature winding to the bars of a commutator. Pacinotti's machine was a practical dynamo because it produced steady current without pulses.
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===Re: Suggested revisions to the plaque citation -- [[User:Sbarmada|Sbarmada]] ([[User talk:Sbarmada|talk]]) 15:29, 20 September 2017 (UTC)===
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Thank you for your suggestion on how to improve the plaque citation. In order to take into account your comment we propose the following new version:
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In 1863, Antonio Pacinotti, at the University of Pisa, described and built a novel type of direct-current dynamo equipped with a ring armature. He connected the groups of turns of the closed armature winding to the bars of a commutator. Pacinotti's machine was a practical dynamo because it produced steady current without pulses.
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Pacinotti observed that the dynamo could work both as a generator and as a motor.
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We are confident you may accept the above citation and I thank you again for your helpful suggestions.
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Sincerely

Revision as of 15:29, 20 September 2017

Suggested revisions to the plaque citation -- Administrator4 (talk) 13:37, 22 June 2017 (UTC)

I would suggest the following revision to the plaque citation in order to: 1) reduce the wording to less than the 70-word absolute maximum, 2) emphasise the main significance of Pacinotti's advance (namely the absence of pulses), 3) shift the passive voice to active, 4) delete the phrase about working both as a motor and a generator (since that is not unusual of dynamos) and 5) delete reference to the work of Gramme.

In 1863, Antonio Pacinotti, at the University of Pisa, described and built an early direct-current dynamo equipped with a ring armature, the first in Italy. He connected the groups of turns of the closed armature winding to the bars of a commutator. Pacinotti's machine was a practical dynamo because it produced steady current without pulses.

Re: Suggested revisions to the plaque citation -- Sbarmada (talk) 15:29, 20 September 2017 (UTC)

Replace this text with your reply

Thank you for your suggestion on how to improve the plaque citation. In order to take into account your comment we propose the following new version:

In 1863, Antonio Pacinotti, at the University of Pisa, described and built a novel type of direct-current dynamo equipped with a ring armature. He connected the groups of turns of the closed armature winding to the bars of a commutator. Pacinotti's machine was a practical dynamo because it produced steady current without pulses. Pacinotti observed that the dynamo could work both as a generator and as a motor.

We are confident you may accept the above citation and I thank you again for your helpful suggestions.

Sincerely