Difference between revisions of "Milestone-Proposal talk:Hollow dielectric beam waveguide of sub-millimeter wavelength range, 1966"

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The historical significance and obstacles section is still missing, as are the references.
 
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== Possible Re-Wording -- [[User:Allisonmarsh|Allisonmarsh]] ([[User talk:Allisonmarsh|talk]]) 22:54, 13 May 2019 (UTC) ==
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Note: These wordsmithing suggestions are based solely on milestone style guidelines and ongoing discussions with the History Committee.  They are not based on factual information.
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'''A pioneering achievement in the national development of the near-millimeter and sub-millimeter wavelength ranges occurred at the Department of Quasioptics of the Institute of Radio-Physics and Electronics NASU in 1966 with the design of the hollow dielectric beam waveguide and a kit of associated components. This work laid foundation for the original transmission-line technology and measuring techniques, with main application in hot plasma diagnostics in the Tokamak nuclear fusion machines.
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This eliminated the passive voice and references to individuals (rather than the technical achievement).

Latest revision as of 22:54, 13 May 2019

Still waiting for supporting materials -- Allisonmarsh (talk) 22:51, 13 May 2019 (UTC)

The historical significance and obstacles section is still missing, as are the references.

Possible Re-Wording -- Allisonmarsh (talk) 22:54, 13 May 2019 (UTC)

Note: These wordsmithing suggestions are based solely on milestone style guidelines and ongoing discussions with the History Committee. They are not based on factual information.

Suggested new text: A pioneering achievement in the national development of the near-millimeter and sub-millimeter wavelength ranges occurred at the Department of Quasioptics of the Institute of Radio-Physics and Electronics NASU in 1966 with the design of the hollow dielectric beam waveguide and a kit of associated components. This work laid foundation for the original transmission-line technology and measuring techniques, with main application in hot plasma diagnostics in the Tokamak nuclear fusion machines. This eliminated the passive voice and references to individuals (rather than the technical achievement).