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I have emailed the proposer this suggested change & will update this page with his response.
I have emailed the proposer this suggested change & will update this page with his response.
===Re: Wordsmithing -- [[User:Allisonmarsh|Allisonmarsh]] ([[User talk:Allisonmarsh|talk]]) 16:32, 15 February 2021 (UTC)===
: The proposer suggested the following changes to get it down to 65 words, which I approve.
In 1988, in the Laboratory of Intelligent Machines and Bioinformation Systems located in this building, signals emanating from a human brain controlled the movement of a physical object (a robot) for the first time worldwide. That linked EEG research with robotics and opened a new communication channel between humans and machines. The EEG controlled physical objects (wheelchairs, exoskeletons, etc) became reality, for benefit of humanity.
(65 words)

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Wordsmithing -- Allisonmarsh (talk) 16:38, 31 January 2021 (UTC)

Suggested change citation:

In 1988, in the Laboratory of Intelligent Machines and Bioinformation Systems located in this building, signals emanating from a human brain controlled the movement of a physical object (a robot) for the first time. This research linked EEG research with robotics and opened a new communication channel between humans and machines. The research and applications of controlling physical objects, such as home appliances, wheelchairs, prostheses, drones, and other robots, has since spread worldwide.

(73 words)

This removes the passive voice in the original first sentence. It also offers additional information as to the importance of the technical achievement.

I have emailed the proposer this suggested change & will update this page with his response.

Re: Wordsmithing -- Allisonmarsh (talk) 16:32, 15 February 2021 (UTC)

The proposer suggested the following changes to get it down to 65 words, which I approve.

In 1988, in the Laboratory of Intelligent Machines and Bioinformation Systems located in this building, signals emanating from a human brain controlled the movement of a physical object (a robot) for the first time worldwide. That linked EEG research with robotics and opened a new communication channel between humans and machines. The EEG controlled physical objects (wheelchairs, exoskeletons, etc) became reality, for benefit of humanity.

(65 words)