Difference between revisions of "Milestone-Proposal talk:First Fiber Bragg Grating Demonstration at Communications Research Centre Canada in 1978"

(Advocate's Review -- Dmichelson (talk) 11:36, 4 January 2020 (UTC))
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I've significantly edited the proposal, including the title and citation. I've removed a duplicate set of references and added a significant amount of clarifying text.
 
I've significantly edited the proposal, including the title and citation. I've removed a duplicate set of references and added a significant amount of clarifying text.
  
The original proposal focused strictly on the events of 1978. There was little mention of subsequent events or the many recognitions that this achievement has received.
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The original proposal focused strictly on the events of 1978. There was little mention of subsequent events or the many awards and recognitions that this achievement has received.
  
 
The original proposal made frequent mention that this achievement "''established an unknown photosensitivity of the fiber''."  This wording seems very strange to me so I've substituted what I believe is more clear.
 
The original proposal made frequent mention that this achievement "''established an unknown photosensitivity of the fiber''."  This wording seems very strange to me so I've substituted what I believe is more clear.
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The section concerning the obstacles that had to be overcome fails to address the question and should likely be rewritten. However, the rest of the proposals now in good shape.
  
 
In my opinion, the case for this proposal is among the strongest that I've yet encountered. I hope that it is approved easily.
 
In my opinion, the case for this proposal is among the strongest that I've yet encountered. I hope that it is approved easily.
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Given the number of awards and recognition that this work has received, I don't believe that it is necessary to seek more than one additional expert review.

Revision as of 12:29, 4 January 2020

Advocate's Review -- Dmichelson (talk) 11:36, 4 January 2020 (UTC)

I've significantly edited the proposal, including the title and citation. I've removed a duplicate set of references and added a significant amount of clarifying text.

The original proposal focused strictly on the events of 1978. There was little mention of subsequent events or the many awards and recognitions that this achievement has received.

The original proposal made frequent mention that this achievement "established an unknown photosensitivity of the fiber." This wording seems very strange to me so I've substituted what I believe is more clear.

The section concerning the obstacles that had to be overcome fails to address the question and should likely be rewritten. However, the rest of the proposals now in good shape.

In my opinion, the case for this proposal is among the strongest that I've yet encountered. I hope that it is approved easily.

Given the number of awards and recognition that this work has received, I don't believe that it is necessary to seek more than one additional expert review.