Milestone-Proposal talk:Electric Lighting Of The Kingdom of Hawaii 1886-1888
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Minor copy edits -- Allisonmarsh (talk) 20:41, 10 September 2017 (UTC)
I think this milestone citation looks good. The only (very minor) changes I would suggest would be to lowercase the "of" in the title and to put the date into the IEEE format (day month year).
Otherwise, I support moving this milestone to committee for discussion and approval.
-Allison
Re: Minor copy edits -- Administrator4 (talk) 14:36, 11 September 2017 (UTC)
- I would also recommend changing "tour around the world" to "world tour"